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I wish it would rain
That it would wash you away
Out of my skin

I wish the clouds would part
Shine light on realization
What I could be

I wish there was a rainbow
An arc of brilliant colors
A sign to give me hope
I'm sinking fast...
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GwenneAreble Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
We all need hope :) Why do you say you are sinking?
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SevereWeather Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I'm in love with someone that doesn't know what he wants. So he decided to end it between us to try to figure it out.
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GwenneAreble Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh, I'm so sorry hun.
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DGVeil Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2014  Hobbyist
It's pretty one. Sad, but pretty.
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SevereWeather Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you
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DGVeil Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2014  Hobbyist
You're welcome!
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BellaGBear Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I like this one. It is short and to the point but does not loose in emotion.
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SevereWeather Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :)
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himesama13 Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014
Ooh! Nice to think of that! T-T
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SevereWeather Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks
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AbsentM Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014
So after he's washed away, and the clouds part and you look down into his puddle, would you still see him or you?

I've felt this way before too. I realized, it is like shaking an addiction. In that, as does an addict, I was constantly validating my reasoning for keeping this version of me alive. I ended up calling it Substance (feeling) + Robert.
"If I made this feeling go away or fought against it, it would mean I was wrong to feel this way, or it would mean I was faking it, or it would mean it wasn't real."
I kept telling myself some part of me would be lost. And then there was the nagging thought, what exactly did "normal" feel like. Would I recognize it? The worst was when I'd write about it, and feel a little better getting it out. A few days would pass, and I'd be occupied with something that kept my mind off the situation. Then I'd read what I wrote, and almost feel ashamed, that I didn't still feel that way. :P Like I was allowing the fucking poem to re-edit me!

I ended up concluding I was fighting against years of programming that told me this feeling was special, supernatural, spiritual and meaningful and those concepts were being fueled by the chemicals of my animal hardware. I found the feeling wasn't rare, it's as transient as the people that inspired it. And I realized it right when I met someone new. Take heart in small improvements, and believe it'll happen again.

I hope you don't take this as me trivializing your feeling, by the way. Just another perspective. Hope it helped.

Don't sink too much.
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MiraKial Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Hi, I just want to say that was so well said and very helpful.
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SevereWeather Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :)
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robodude2829 Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Sad, but very relateable.
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SevereWeather Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks
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SETBLKYOEM Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Lovely piece. Most of us have felt this way some time.
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SevereWeather Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you
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SETBLKYOEM Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Nod 
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Envy1996 Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You can be what you want to be.
Someday you will see.

It's not that far
From who you are.

The person that you see,
They will not flee.

They're in your heart,
A work of art.

They play a part,
They have much to impart.

They can change,
They can be strange.

Let you not worry,
There's no need to hurry.
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PurpleRayRomeo Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful <3
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SevereWeather Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks :)
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