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You have learned that these days
Innocence is hard to find
Between the contrast of black to white
An expansion of misleading motives
Where no one cares what is wrong
And what is right

You're just a shell of the former you
From the outside no one can tell
The inner battles you've been through
The ideas that have dragged you to hell
Every now and then I see a part of a former you


Hiding behind your smile
A shadow of doubt
What in this life could be worthwhile?
Mind racing to find purpose
But returning empty handed
Complete lack of passion
This is not what you had planned

You're just a shell of the former you
From the outside no one can tell
The inner battles you've been through
The ideas that have dragged you to hell
Every now and then I see a part of a former you


How has it come to this?
Sweet dreams have become deranged nightmares
Keeping you from the peaceful escape you crave

Enclosed in a cage you built around yourself
Unheard screams echoing back in your face
Begging for someone to notice... begging for help

You're just a shell of the former you
From the outside no one can tell
The inner battles you've been through
The ideas that have dragged you to hell
Every now and then I see a part of a former you
I haven't put these words to music yet, but I have an idea.
This is something very different from my other songs.
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:iconwdnest:
wdnest Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2012  Professional Writer
This is stunning. Wonderful thoughts and ideas here and I read it to the end. Such talent you have. I will keep reading your work. Stunning.
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SevereWeather Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :) that means a lot to me
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:iconwdnest:
wdnest Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2012  Professional Writer
No worries
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raffairy Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
beautiful :)
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Photopathica Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2012   General Artist
Hi!
We have chosen your work for our Featured Folder for September!
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SevereWeather Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Awesome! Thank you
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Photopathica Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2012   General Artist
welcome :)
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LovableMuffin Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I can really relate to this one :\
Beautiful!
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:iconsevereweather:
SevereWeather Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I know how you feel. Cheer up, love :)
and thank you!
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zembelle Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is haunting, and beautiful.
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SevereWeather Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks :)
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:iconzembelle:
zembelle Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome! :hug:
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ServantsRequiem Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I love this.
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:iconsevereweather:
SevereWeather Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :)
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writingbubble Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2012
wow <3
it's great *sparkling-eyes*
would you mind telling me when you've put them to music?
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SevereWeather Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I can do that :)
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writingbubble Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2012
cool! <3
thank you :3
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PatriciaC123 Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2012
This is phenomenal. I was close to tears. I would love to hear this being put to music. Guitar/ Piano would be best. :nod:

Question: Did you mean to not skip the italics? It's meshed with the normal words.
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SevereWeather Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
fixed it :)
Thank you! and I was thinking acoustic guitar or piano actually, so yay!
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PatriciaC123 Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2012
Great minds... :D How do you plan on adding music to it? With your own instruments or something such as GarageBand? Are you gonna add to the internet?
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SevereWeather Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'll play and sing it myself. Once it's recorded I usually put my songs on Sound Cloud
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PatriciaC123 Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2012
Can you give a link to me in a note? I'd be happy to here it.:D
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SevereWeather Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I can do that once I get the music figured out haha
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PatriciaC123 Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2012
Cool. :boogie:
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zembelle Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Me too! D:
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